|
|
Post by Rena Hollyday on Nov 23, 2010 15:05:16 GMT -5
[atrb=border,0,true][atrb=width,450,true][bg=444444][atrb=background,http://i875.photobucket.com/albums/ab320/luxxray/efpattern1.png]
 GYM LEADER RENA HOLLYDAY !Looking at my own reflection When suddenly it changes, violently it changes...oh no...there is no turning back now. You've woken up the demon in me
| [atrb=border,0,true][atrb=width,450,true][bg=444444][atrb=background,http://i875.photobucket.com/albums/ab320/luxxray/efpattern4.png]
THE STARS LEAN DOWN TO KISS YOU
AND I LIE AWAKE AND MISS YOU [ THE INTRODUCTION ] FULL NAME: Rena Hollyday
NICKNAMES:
AGE: 16
GENDER: Female
SEXUALITY: Straight
TRAINER CLASS: Olivine Gym Leader
FACE CLAIM: Kingdom Hearts
[b]Kairi[/b] - [i]Rena Hollyday[/i] |
[/size][/color] CUZ I'LL DOZE OFF SAFE AND SOUNDLY
BUT I'LL MISS YOUR ARMS AROUND ME [ PERSONALITY ] THE POSITIVE:
1. Very Friendly
2. Very Caring
3. Puts her city before herself
THE NEGATIVE:
Everyone in Olivine knows of Rena since she was the daughter of the previous gym leader and this creates a lot of stress for Rena. At times she is good at hiding this yet, mostly during battles, it can become oblivious that she is unsettled by the expectations. Hollyday does not hesitate to trust anyone before knowing if they are good or bad, this has got her in trouble multiple times when Rena was a child. The girl has been known to do many clumsy things, like tripping over the Pokemon food bowl that she just put down, inside her Pokemon Gym.
When Rena feels betrayed or extremely upset she can become secretive about her feelings to a point that she doesn't even speak to anyone, except to Drag.
1. A bit of a klutz
2. Can be tempermental at times
3. Childish at times
[/b]: Dragons, Water, The Lighthouse, Swimming, DISLIKES: Staying in one area (meaning she'll often not be in the gym during Monday, Wednesday, Friday and Sunday but will be somewhere in the city) HOBBIES: Swimming, Riding Drag (her Dragonite) in the air, FEARS: The dark (will cry if feeling alone in a dark area) [/ul][/blockquote][/size][/color] WHEN VIOLET EYES GET BRIGHTER
AND HEAVY WINGS GET LIGHTER [ ABOUT YOURSELF ] YOUR ALIAS: Rena (or) Ren
EXPERIENCE: 2 or so years in Wrestling RP. A few months in Legend of Zelda. Currently a member of a camelot RP and barely a week of pokemon RP'ing experience.
OTHER CHARACTERS: NONE
CONTACT INFO: PM
WHERE YOU FOUND US: Support Board
[/size][/color] I'LL FORGET THE WORLD THAT I KNEW
BUT I SWEAR I WON'T FORGET YOU [ CREDIT TO ASHTON ]
THIS LOVELY APPLICATION WAS CREATED BY PIKACHEW FOR DREAM ON
IF YOU STEAL OR MANIPULATE IT IN ANY WAY SHE WILL COME AFTER YOU
AND HYPER-BEAM YOUR SORRY ASS~! PLEASE DO NOT CHANGE OR STEAL! [/td][/tr][/table][/center] |
|
|
|
Post by Rena Hollyday on Nov 24, 2010 14:38:32 GMT -5
[atrb=border,0,true][atrb=width,450,true][bg=444444][atrb=background,http://i875.photobucket.com/albums/ab320/luxxray/efpattern1.png]
 GYM LEADER RENA HOLLYDAY !Bright lights, they cast a shadow...but can I speak? Well is it hard understanding, I'm incomplete.
| [atrb=border,0,true][atrb=width,450,true][bg=444444][atrb=background,http://i875.photobucket.com/albums/ab320/luxxray/efpattern4.png]
THE SPACES BETWEEN MY FINGERS
ARE RIGHT WHERE YOURS FIT PERFECTLY [ PKMN TEAM ]
NICKNAME: Whisper
LEVEL: 46
MOVESET:
1. Double Team
2. Hydro Pump
3. Agility
4. Twister
|
[/b]: Whisper is a male Kingdra who doesn't believe that Rena has earned his respect yet. He was only caught not so long ago and can sometimes ignore her orders. This is unless his pride is on the line; Whisper is a very proud pokemon who can be a sore loser against water pokemon. Whisper is very proud of it's swimming skills. However he doesn't trust his owner's childishness enough to let her ride him.[/ul]  NICKNAME: Tini LEVEL: 47 MOVESET: 1. Dragon Rush 2. Dragon Tail 3. Aqua Tail 4. Ice Beam [/b]: Tini is the first ever pokemon Rena ever caught, when the girl was 13. Tini is a female Dratini that, unlike fellow Dratini's, is very outgoing and very friendly to other humans. She even entertains the little children of Olivine City (aged 6 to 12) whenever Rena ain't battling. When Hollyday decorates the gym she has Tini using ice beam to create ice sultures.[/ul]  NICKNAME: Drag LEVEL: 50 MOVESET: 1. Dragon Claw 2. Fly 3. Fire Punch 4. ThunderPunch [/b]: Drag was originally a Dratini that Rena got for her 5th birthday and she raised him ever since. Drag and Rena has a special friendship that it seems at times that Drag is kind of like a parent figure to her. Whenever Hollyday is in trouble Drag will always be there to help her. While when Rena feels upset or crying Drag will comfort her. Rena never puts Drag in the pokeball since they have an unbreakable companionship.[/ul]  NICKNAME: Iggy LEVEL: 46 MOVESET: 1. Defense Curl 2. Rollout 3. Flamethrower 4. Sing [/b]: Iggy is a joyful female Igglybuff. Even though Rena was never caught Iggy everyone in the city classes the pokemon as her's since it has been, and trained, with her for three years. Iggy holds an everstone, meaning it can't evolve, and Rena doesn't mind this.[/ul] [/size][/color][/blockquote] BUT DRENCHED IN VANILLA TWILIGHTI'LL SIT ON THE FRONT PORCH ALL NIGHT [ STORAGE BOX ]list all of your character's boxed pokemon here. if none apply, feel free to leave blank. you can use pokemon mini sprites if you would like (the small animated ones - not the battle sprites)
[/color][/blockquote][/center] [/td][/tr][/table][/center] |
|
|
|
Post by PIKACHEW ❤ on Nov 24, 2010 15:36:16 GMT -5
REJECTEDOne, your character is not fleshed out at all. Two out of three of her negative traits aren't even negative traits at all. You need to flesh that out. A lot. You also need to get a face claim where the art isn't in that 3D look - it's out of place with the rest of the face claims. Your grammar is horrible. Really, it's hard for me to even understand half of what you've written for your pokemon notes. You have clearly shown that you are at a beginner level of role play, not the intermediate/advanced level of most of the members here. It would be silly to role play in an environment where you're at a totally different level. Experience means how long you've been role playing - like, in my case, six years ~ You can't say the Kingdra was caught 'last week' since there is really no indication of time on the site (basically: it's pretty timeless). Her pokemon, also, are higher levels than Cyril's, and since he's the last gym leader, that's a bit insane. Also, pokemon classified as 'rare' pokemon can't be shiny unless you talk it over with me, first! Since Dratini is on the rare list, and you haven't talked over the shininess with me first, you can't make it shiny. All in all, I would suggest you finding a pokemon role play more suitable for your level or please rewrite the application to fit the standards the rest of the members here have set. Sorry, but I just can't accept this application the way it is.
|
|
|
|
Post by Rena Hollyday on Nov 25, 2010 2:46:06 GMT -5
Sorry, I didn't know you have to ask for a shiny...I'll change it. |
|
|
|
Post by PIKACHEW ❤ on Nov 25, 2010 17:36:20 GMT -5
STILL REJECTEDYou have not changed the most vital part of your application - the personality - thus I cannot accept this. It has been said already, but I will say it again: you need to role play on a site that is closer to your level; it would not benefit you or the other members of Dream On if you cannot even post a sufficient application, let alone role play on the same level as most of the members. I'm sorry, but this is my final verdict.
I am going to move this application into the 'old bios'. Once you have gained more experience, you are welcome to come back and create a new character and we would love to have you here ~
|
|
